"Company purpose: Define your company in a single declarative sentence. This is harder than it sounds — and more important than anything else on the page."
— Sequoia Capital, Pitch Deck Template
We've built a powerful, AI-native, cloud-first collaboration platform with deep integrations.Acme is the shared inbox that lets a 5-person support team feel like 20. (One sentence: who it's for, what changes.)
我们做了一个 AI 笔记工具,支持多端同步、AI 摘要、团队协作和全文搜索。(功能清单,无痛点)知识工作者每天读 3 小时资料,一周后只记得不到 10%(疼,有数字有画面)。我们的工具让你读完即沉淀,需要时自动浮现在眼前(药,正对那道疼)。
Our app has reminders, tags, and cross-device sync.You forget 90% of what you read within a week — the insight you needed is buried in a note you'll never reopen. Our app resurfaces the right note at the moment you need it.
适用场景 · 常见错误
✓ 任何 pitch、立项、说服领导改变现状、产品 landing page 的首屏文案
✗ 维生素错觉:问题只是"可以更好",而非"现在很痛"——投资人不会为"更好"买单
✗ 问题太抽象("效率低、体验差")——没有人、没有频率、没有数字,就不疼
✗ 还没让人疼就跳到方案——落差未建立,方案落空
✗ 为了煽情夸大问题到失真——一旦被识破,整场信任崩塌
关键参考
Robert McKee《Story: Substance, Structure, Style》(1997);HBR 访谈《Storytelling That Moves People》(2003) · Chip & Dan Heath《Made to Stick》"具体"一章
"The best strategic narratives don't begin with the product. They begin with a big, undeniable change in the world — one that creates high stakes."
— Andy Raskin, "The Greatest Sales Deck I've Ever Seen" (2016)
我们要做企业级 AI Agent 平台,支持多模型编排和私有化部署。(从产品开场,无"势")过去四十年,软件都在等人来点击操作。现在这个时代正在终结——软件开始自己行动。看不到这一点的公司,会成为下一个柯达。这,就是为什么是现在。(从世界之变开场,制造高利害)
We're building an AI agent platform for the enterprise.For 40 years, software waited for a human to click. That era is ending: software now acts on its own. Companies that miss this shift will be the next Blockbuster — that's why now, and why us.
适用场景 · 常见错误
✓ 融资 pitch、品类创造型产品发布、内部推动重大战略转向
✗ "Why Now"缺席——投资人立刻反问"为什么不是三年前别人没做,三年后不会太晚"
✗ 变化太小或人尽皆知("大家越来越忙了")——撑不起赢家输家的高利害
✗ 描绘了应许之地,却没把听众/客户放进去当主角——他们只是旁观者
✗ 谨慎:成熟稳定的市场里硬造"世界之变",会显得浮夸失真
关键参考
Andy Raskin《The Greatest Sales Deck I've Ever Seen》(Medium, 2016) · Peter Thiel《Zero to One》(2014)"秘密"与逆向真相一章
"Price is an important concern. Hotels leave you disconnected from the city and its culture. No easy way exists to book a room with a local, or become a host."
— Airbnb Pitch Deck, "Problem" slide (2009)
The travel market is huge and growing fast.2B trips are booked worldwide each year → 560M go online → we serve the 10.6M who want to stay with a local. (Funnel, not adjectives.)
适用场景 · 常见错误
✓ 任何需要"一眼看懂"的对外材料:pitch、一页纸、产品落地页、对外汇报
✗ 一页塞多个观点——观众的眼睛和耳朵抢带宽,结果哪个都没记住
✗ 市场用形容词不用数字("巨大""蓝海")——形容词不能帮投资人做判断
✗ 抄它的"朴素设计"却不抄它的"结构与克制"——朴素不是目的,清晰才是
关键参考
Airbnb 2009 Seed Pitch Deck(公开可查,被 Slidebean、TechCrunch 反复拆解) · Geoffrey Moore《Crossing the Chasm》的定位句式("For …who…, X is a…that…, unlike…")
逻辑链通用,但权重要变。对内:"市场/竞争"换成"这件事对战略多重要、不做的代价";"团队"换成"为什么我最该拿这笔资源";"财务"换成 ROI 与风险。"为什么是现在"反而更重要——内部资源零和,你得回答"为什么这季度投我而非别人"。晋升 packet 则换成"我承接的难题—我的判断与行动—可量化的结果"。